雅思笔试写作真题外教范文 怎么改善不健康的饮食习惯

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　　1，题目

　　2，审题

　　3，高分范文

　　4，范文地道词汇中英对照，包括：

　　题目改述

　　报告类大作文高分句型

　　展示“词汇丰富度”的词汇&短语

　　展示“连贯与衔接”的词汇&句型

　　

　　题目：

　　Many people like to eat unhealthy food even though they know it’s bad for them. Why? What are effective ways to improve people's eating habits?

　　审题：

　　Type: Report 报告类 (Reason and solution 理由&解决方案)

　　Body 1: Reasons: laziness and convenience

　　Body 2: Solution: Education and regulation

　　Key words: why/effective ways to improve

　　

　　

　　- Model Answer 高分范文 -

　　A great swathe of the population enjoys eating food that is non-nutritious and that has a deleterious effect on their health despite knowing this is the case. This essay shall explore the reasons behind this phenomenon, along with suggesting methods that could help people to eat more healthily.

　　One of the major causes behind this habit of eating unhealthy food is that many of these foods are convenient to either purchase or prepare. This is especially true when it comes to the fast-food industry, whereby instead of finding healthy alternatives, many people will simply opt for the easy and time-saving method of ordering from McDonald's or KFC, or other such junk food outlets. Likewise, in today’s world of disposable goods and ready-to-use products, many have become lazy and would rather elect for opening a package of processed food than to spend the time buying healthy ingredients to cook by themselves.

　　To counteract this trend of unhealthy eating, probably the most effective method that can be brought to bear on this trend is that of education. Just as Mcdonald's understands that marketing to children can help secure future consumers, so society should understand that by educating the young about the benefits of eating healthy food, they are more likely to avoid unhealthy foods in their later life. Government regulations can also help to squelch peoples’ desire for foods that in the long-term can have a devasting effect on health, with such policies as an anti-fat tax or an extra tax on foods that contain additives proven to be toxic, helping to guide citizens’ dietary habits.

　　In conclusion, the main impetuses for people to acquire an unhealthy dietary tendency are those of convenience and laziness, and that both education, especially of the young, and governmental regulatory policies, can help to overcome this negative trend within society.

　　

　　- Essay Analysis 范文解析 -

　　- (1) Introduction

　　Paraphrasing from the Statement/Question 题目改述:

　　Many people = A great swathe of the population

　　like to eat = enjoys eating

　　unhealthy food = food that is non-nutritious and that has a deleterious effect on their health

　　even though = despite knowing

　　Standard Phrase for the “Report” type essay 报告类大作文高分句型：

　　This essay shall explore the reasons behind this phenomenon, along with suggesting methods that

　　Words showing Cohesion (C&C) 展示“连贯与衔接”的词汇和短语:

　　that

　　and that

　　, despite

　　this is the case

　　This

　　, along with

　　Vocabulary 高分地道词汇和短语：

　　a great swathe of 一大批；一大片；很多

　　non-nutritious 没有营养的

　　deleterious effect on 对……产生有负面影响；对……有有害的影响

　　healthily 健康地

　　- (2) Body 1 -

　　Aspects that must be referred to 这段需要提到：Why?

　　Standard IELTS essay phrase 雅思高频句型：

　　One of the major causes

　　Vocabulary and Collocations 高分地道词汇和短语：

　　behind this habit of 在这个习惯背后

　　the fast-food industry 快餐产业

　　alternatives 备选

　　opt for 选择

　　time-saving method 省时的方法

　　outlets 专营店

　　disposable goods 一次性商品

　　ready-to-use products 即用产品；现成产品

　　elect for 选择

　　processed food 加工食品

　　Words Showing Cohesion [Signposting words, conjunctions, relative pronouns] (C&C) 展示“连贯与衔接”的词汇和短语：

　　is that

　　to either

　　This is especially true when it comes to

　　, whereby instead of

　　, many people will simply

　　or other such

　　Likewise,

　　, many

　　rather ____ than

　　- (3) Body 2 -

　　Aspects that must be referred to 这段需要提到：Effective ways to improve people's eating habits

　　Standard IELTS essay phrase 雅思高频句型：

　　To counteract this trend of 为了抵制/缓和这种趋势

　　Vocabulary and Collocations 高分地道词汇和短语：

　　be brought to bear on 应用；调动

　　help secure future 保障未来

　　to avoid 避免

　　later life 以后的生活

　　government regulations 政府规章

　　to squelch 制止

　　in the long-term 从长远来看

　　have a devastating effect on 对……有破坏性的影响

　　anti-fat tax

　　additives proven to be toxic 有害的添加剂

　　to guide 引导

　　dietary habit 饮食习惯

　　Words Showing Cohesion [Signposting words, conjunctions, relative pronouns] (C&C) 展示“连贯与衔接”的词汇和短语：

　　this trend

　　, probably the most

　　that

　　is that of

　　Just as….., so

　　that by

　　, they

　　more likely to

　　their

　　, with such

　　as

　　, helping to

　　- (4) Conclusion -

　　Standard IELTS essay phrase 雅思高频句型：

　　In conclusion,

　　Vocabulary and Collocations 高分地道词汇和短语：

　　impetus(es) 推动；动力

　　to acquire 采取

　　tendency 趋势

　　laziness 懒惰

　　governmental regulatory policies 监管政策

　　to overcome 克服

　　negative trend 消极趋势

　　Words Showing Cohesion [Signposting words, conjunctions, relative pronouns] (C&C) 展示“连贯与衔接”的词汇和短语：

　　, and that

　　both

　　, especially

　　, and

　　this

　　

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